Apoem for a never ending winter. How is is this?

"fnally spring"








Winter wont leave me alone,


I disappeaed anf returned with


a vengence..


May 12th snow flakes


torturing my knees..


Spring had sprung all around,


then her mood shanged


like a spurned women.Old man winters ovrstayed his welcome and its time for him to die once again.


spring only comesonce a year,


but wipe out all fear,


Crocus, Liliies,, all sublime,


I felel love this time.

Apoem for a never ending winter. How is is this?
This is the best part:





"Spring had sprung all around,


then her mood shanged


like a spurned women."





This is the worst:


Old man winters ovrstayed his welcome and its time for him to die once again.


spring only comesonce a year,





Don't mention Old Man Winter, please.... it's a trope that need never be alluded to again. Think of a different metaphor for winter... "spurned woman" is EXCELLENT for spring reverting!





"snow flakes torturing my knees" HOW did they torture your knees? When I think of snow flakes I think of little cold pin pricks, a chinese water variety of torture or something. Convey what you mean specifically.





"returned with a vengeance" -- Die Hard. This is lazy writing.





But I love the part about spring, and I think the ending is a nice twist. Work on this and post again...
Reply:In the cold dreary winter , eagerly waiting for spring; only when it appears briefly winter overtakes it once again. Springs comes and this time flowers and warmth brings love. So gratifying .
Reply:Very unique poem for spring. Great lovely,beautiful and lively like lillies....i love flowers and lillies best.U R POET OF ALL THE TIMES.
Reply:lots of literary devices..very good :D